- January 21, 2018 at 12:41 pm #1296
Hi TW Member
This forum topic is for those of you who have a piece of writing that you would like feedback on, or have a question related to your writing experience. We are all here to offer support and encouragement. Just respond in this place and we’ll ‘talk’ about it.January 25, 2018 at 1:30 pm #1332Des O’NeillParticipant
I have recieved some very positive feedback from my recent story I shared at the recent meeting.
Blue hill triumph.
Of course I am open for more constructive critic. That way I can rewrite the same topic, with your input.
One suggestion was to make the reader feel the pain in legs and exhaustion as I conquere the hill.
Des O’Neill.January 28, 2018 at 12:29 pm #1335Hazel MenehiraParticipant
Thanks for starting this Sally…have always found it to be worthwhile on TW web page since the first time many years ago. Hope members use it to benfit writing and fellowship. Blessings to all HzlJanuary 29, 2018 at 8:23 am #1336
Thanks Hazel. Hopefully we’ll start to get members brave enough to post their work and ask for feedback (like Des did)!January 29, 2018 at 8:42 am #1337
Thanks for being our first member brave enough to share your work and ask for feedback. I enjoyed reading Blue Hill Triumph and intend to put my editor’s cap on and send you my suggestions for how it could be structurally and grammatically improved. If you consent, I could offer my ideas here so that other members could see it and say whether they agreed or not. It’s a good way for new writers to learn that, in the end, it is YOUR work and any changes suggested are only that – suggestions – not changes you MUST make! (Except for grammar and punctuation errors that need to be corrected if you want the writing to be published. 😊
SallyFebruary 5, 2018 at 9:43 pm #1355Des O’NeillParticipant
Thanks Sally. Sorry about the delay, I have been busy with my version of Sagaland…..Gondwanaland. And also been readjusting Blue Hill triumph thanks to the positive advice or suggestions I have recieved. I wonder if I should publish what I have worked on in the rewrite, here.May 5, 2018 at 5:57 am #1493Courtney HansenParticipant
I would love to get some feedback on my text from a wider crowd especially from other writers and people who don’t know me (family and friends can be so wonderfully encouraging but perhaps not always the most honest!!). I write short stories and anecdotes about my time at sea. Should I just post in this forum or should I email you?
CourtneyMay 7, 2018 at 8:04 pm #1495
If you post your writing here in the forum, every member will be able to give feedback and that will give you a wider view of your work. Another option is to read your work in one of our small groups and ask for specific feedback. It helps to bring copies for the other members in the small group so that they can read along. I know I always look forward to reading the work of other writers in our group.
SallyMay 8, 2018 at 2:57 pm #1498Courtney HansenParticipant
Thanks for the advice. My stories are roughly 3000 words, perhaps a bit long to read at one of the meetings! I will find one to post here.
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